Kayla,

Beautiful work here. You’re giving yourself an origin story, all the while telling us the tale of your relationship with this particular comic book. Absolutely beautiful job!!

I agree that you might […]

Pam,

Gotta say it again — I love that The 😉

I want to reiterate what we talked about last week — you’re doing a great job so far, and I would encourage you to put more of your own journey reading this […]

Ary,

Beautiful work you’re doing here! I love the outline, and the way you start your story! So strong, so full of life and relationships and character development, just through the way the characters are […]

Farzana,

To answer your most pressing question, you are definitely on the right track!!

As we discussed in class, I really love the way you’re weaving your own storytelling with Kamala’s story. In the next […]

Fede,

You have a very solid start here! I really love the examples you’re bringing up, and the way you’re drawing your readers in — Santa Claus has an origin story?? Dude!! You make us want to read more, and […]

Steeve,

I’ve already sent you an email about your direction here, so check for that — but let me say again that I’m very excited by the direction you’re taking here, and how you’re really taking positive […]

Farzana,

You’re off to a really great start here! I remember from class that we discussed splitting this thematically into a bit on research/the play with witnessing war, then depression, then — I’m so sorry, […]

Steeve,

Wow. This is going in a really fascinating and insightful direction — I love that you’re turning to the author’s life as part of your research! Just make sure that (a) you continue to also refer to the […]

Pam,

Good beginning you have here! I like what you’re researching, and both your sources and topic fit the assignment really well!

As you continue, I want to encourage you to really slow things down and […]

Jaylin,

As I said in class, you are on an absolutely brilliant path here. I absolutely love the outline you were making on your tablet; this is going to be a spectacular paper. The way you seamlessly are […]

Ary,

I know you expressed uncertainty about this in class, so if you want to take it in a different direction, I want to reiterate that that’s completely alright! But, you can also find the scenes where — even […]

Fede,

Thanks so much for posting this — I like the insight into your thought process here. To reiterate what we were discussing in class, I think it would be really useful to shift away from “does” (yes/no […]

Sanjida,

Like we talked about today in class, you’ve done a really brilliant job here at sussing out the different ways that Anon and Nemasani cope with their trauma and with potential loss. I really love how […]

Kayla,

This is a really good start — you’re definitely onto something important here! As you continue drafting, I would encourage you to be a little bolder/more specific in your claim/thesis. For example, […]