- Does each paragraph revolve around the topic of Depression, does it support the topic of Marijuana usage?
- Is my spelling/grammar correct or incorrect? If so, comment where
- Does my writing fall clearly within the structure I have used, or has it become mixed up in certain places, If so comment
- With the issue I brought up, does it make sense to the point where it connects to the play Intersections?
- Do you understand the purpose of this paper, Is it understandable. If not let me know in the comments below
Intersections is a play written and performed by students at Laguardia Community College. This delightful play has captured my attention when I started reading the script. It captivated me and other students because it brings out different stories of college students going through troublesome in which can relate to our daily life experiences. For instance, in the play one of the characters name Janelle seems to be dealing with depression because of her grandma’s illness. Janelle story can relate to any individual who’s going through distress because of losing a significant other. Stories like these can engage the audience because it’s a play giving us a reality show about college students situations, emotions, and handling their behavior on issues like Janelle and other characters are experiencing.
Depression is a brain disorder to make an individual feel moodiness, loss of interest activities, loss of appetite causing them to feel this way every day. Across the worldwide adolescents go through this illness ages 10-19 years old. Depression is a very serious cause of death because it can lead to suicide. In my opinion, I relate depression to one of the characters in the play Intersections. The character I chose is Janelle. In the play, Janelle was devastated to hear her grandma having stage 4 cancer. All Janelle really wanted to do was to take her grandma back home and take care of her rather than being in the hospital with strangers. In this scene, people can relate to how Janelle is feeling because when someone important to you is feeling sick, your first priority is to be there for them. You want to help them, support them, love them and make them not go through with it alone.
In addition, two scenes made me realize the symptoms of depression that teens go through. Janelle was roaming in the hallway skipping class. It seemed like Janelle has lost interest in attending class because she has a lot going on at home. Janelle states “If I come to class anyways I can’t focus”. In another scene, Janelle arrived home and was getting upset with Danielle because the nurse is not helping her grandma enough since she has reached her morphine limit. Janelle behavior shows how irritable she is about her grandma’s illness. Then it leads to Janelle possibly going to buy Marijuana for grandma in order to ease her pain. It makes me think, Janelle could also be using this substance, that way to make her feel relaxed and not think about her grandma coming to an end. So far this is all I have, I really appreciate if you leave some comments in order to help me get rid of my fogginess
So far this is all I have. I really appreciate if you leave some comments in order to help me get rid of my fogginess I have for this research paper. Thank you 🙂
hey maria ,
1.sorry for getting back to you late I think its great where you are heading. you are using the play and research in order to write this essay which is awesome in the sense of how your tying everything together. just don’t loose focus because this is a research paper.
2. I believe your spelling and grammar is correct.
3.i believe your structure is good but don’t loose sight of the research I think you need to make your question a little bit clearer.
4. I am also relating the essay to the play. we are writing this paper because of the play so I feel like you need to mention it and what you have so far is more than enough with involving the play.
5. it defiantly is understandable I just think you need more research and referring to articles and research then mentioning the play.
I hope my comments were helpful! good luck
Maria,
I’m so excited that you chose to look into Janelle’s character and the possible depression that she experiences. I identify with her in that regard, as well, and it’s very exciting to see you really getting into it!
I love how you give specific examples of why you believe Janelle is experiencing depression: I’d love to see you get even deeper into her language, the things she says, etc, to further support your thoughts about her and depression. Remember that your readers might not be super familiar with this, so explaining more through a deeper analysis will be helpful.
If you hadn’t said you were interested in looking into marijuana usage in your questions, I wouldn’t have known: that’s okay, though. It’s okay if you want your paper to focus entirely on the portrayal of depression in the play without getting into marijuana usage (that said, if you do want to focus on depression’s relationship to marijuana usage, you might want to talk about Mike, as well, who arguably is also struggling with depression and he — unlike Janelle — is high throughout the play).
I agree with Nathalie’s suggestions for you about presenting more of your research here: are you interested in bringing articles about depression and community college students into play here? Are you interested in bringing articles about the relationship between depression and marijuana usage? Both of these types of articles — and any others you can think of that you would prefer — can really help expand your analysis of the play. I’m eager to see how that research can help give your paper even more focus and an even deeper analysis.
Again, I love what you’re starting to explore here and can’t wait to see where you go with it!