Rough Draft assignment 3

Life is full of adventures we are never known of what’s going to happened next but each and every moment of life brings change and lesson. Reading the comic Ms. Marvel by G. Willow Wilson, has bought me back to my old life where I struggled transforming to this new world (America), and where I wanted to experience everything that I did not back in my country. There is division in gender. Boys could do anything and girl could not. My siblings could do anything except me because I was a girl. I had restrictions and limitations in my life. I was stuck between my desires and my parents’ expectations and believes on me. My personal life changing experience was coming to America. The bridge between my old life and my new life was an insecure bridge that I struggled to cross and enter in a whole new life which changed everything.

I was so excited, but was somewhat nervous at the same time. It was not only a fun, but it also brought anxiety to my heart about how we would get adjusted to the new environment and culture. I was nervous of how I’ll stick to my own culture and religion and somewhat I was scared of losing it. Because people used to gossip that America is a country of freedom and where young get spoiled and transform their culture and religion. Departing from my old life was the hardest challenge but the minute we stepped out of that airplane into the land of opportunity we looked ahead to the bright future we had lying in front of us that we did not saw in our country. And I was looking towards my freedom because I was told by my friends that girls are free there like bird they could do whatever they want and that there are no restrictions on anything. I was happy then.

Scene 1:

Kamala: “Abu?… can I go to a party tonight?”

Kamala’s Dad: “but it’s not safe for a young girl to be out late at night with strange boys, drinking God knows what…”

Kamala: “… if I was a boy. You’d let me go to the party. My I be excused.

The conversation between Kamala and Kamala’s Dad in scene one shows a lot of overprotection for kamala from her Dad. There is this gender ideology in our culture back in Pakistan that boys are allowed to go out late in nights but girls can’t. Girls are known as family izzat meaning Honor, prestige and reputation. If girls do something wrong the whole society will gossip after that family yet if boys do something wrong, the people won’t give their mistake attention. This is what girls get sad about and wanted to be free. This makes us girls wanting more freedom, wanting and experience of everything that boys do, want to be free like boys.

Scene 2:

Kamala (to herself): IT’S JUST A ONE PARTY. IT’S NOT LIKE I’M ASKING THEIR PERMISSION TO SNORT COCAINE. I’VE ALWAYS DONE WHAT THEY ASK ME TO DO…AREN’T I ALLOWED TO DO ANYHING MY WAY? JUST ONCE? … EVERYBODY ELSE GETS TO BE NORMAL. WHY CAN’T I?

In the above scene two kamala’s very disturb. She wanted to do things that she like, going out to parties and having fun with friends was all she wants to. Yet, her parents did no let her go out to parties’ late night because she is a girl. Her parents were also scared and were being protective. The transition of my old life to my new life has changed in many ways. The way I think about myself, what I want, and understanding of what I want in life from me and what I like to do despite my parents wanting. Back then I my country we never went out to any trips, proms, parties, or graduation except school and home that was all I did in my teenage life. When I came here to America, I remember me and my brother were graduating from my high school and we had prom. I was desperate to go and attend it with all my friends. This was going to be the first party ever I was going to attend. I asked for permission from my parents. My mother started to start conversation with me about other girls and the girl I used to be in my country. She told me that “hira you never attend any parties back then” I was paused and told her okay I am not going to any prom. I then asked my father if I could go to prom with my “girls’ friends” he said when and where and how is it going to be a party and all. I even told him that I won’t eat and drink anything. I explained him everything. He said no at last. I was not shocked nor upset because I knew I was not allowed to attend prom. And so my brother went to prom and I did not. I sometime did get depressed and sad for a while because I did not have anything to do, all I was supposed to do was obeying my parents’ sayings. I did not have any phone when I came here. Once I asked my parents that I want laptop they were upset because I asked for laptop. My father said that this is not the right time for you to keep a laptop. And because I had this thinking that we are in America and we can do anything we want nothing can stop us from what we want to do but I did not know that my culture will come in the middle of my dreams and stopped me from what I want to do. I stayed silent the whole time and I was used to hear no from my parents. Sometimes when my father got mad he would regret bringing us here because he thought we will get spoiled here and forget all the things we had learnt in our country. Even now that I am married my parents still say no to me if I want to go alone to malls or any other things.

1. Can you understand the purpose of this paper? Is it enough understandable?
2. What makes you understand the main message of this assignment?
3. Did I support the argument well enough? yes/no and why?
4. Does any of my writing/ideas/arguments seems unclear? What should I fix?
5. Does the paper go flowing? Are my ideas/examples organize?
6. Did my points/ideas meet the purpose of this paper? Why or why not?