2). As English seems to be your primary language, your essay could potentially benefit by focusing more on how your french background has affected your ability to speak it.
3). (I may be the last person who can say this considering I outright forgot my conclusion in my own essay) I would say yes. The last paragraph feels more like another addition to the essay rather than a proper conclusion.
All in all for a first draft it’s not bad, It (as all first drafts do) just needs some work.
]]>For your body paragraph, you can try adding more information on the 4th question given with the assignment: “What social factors do you think contribute to attitudes that people have towards your language(s)/dialect(s)? Racial? Socioeconomic class? Cultural? Education? Ethnic? Sexual or gender identity association? Physical/mental impairment? Anything else? Explain why any of these might contribute to people’s attitudes towards your language(s)/dialect(s).”
Secondly, I think you can add some transitions sentences from ending your introduction to going into your body paragraph. Same with ending your body paragraph and going into your conclusion.
Lastly, I think you can provide a few more examples/details as to your experience with being an English speaker and a French speaker and how it’s impacted you as a bilingual person.
Oh, also when I did this feedback, I did not see any questions at the bottom so just a little heads up! ☺
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