Comments on: (Malekie) Reflective Essay Draft #1

By: Inés

Inés — Fri, 05 Oct 2018 13:55:13 +0000

Malekie, make sure to go back to the questions and the rubric and review the objective of this assignment – language attitudes. I think that you need to work on this essay and I would recommend to review this week readings. Please, diuble check my comments on your essay.

By: Alisia

Alisia — Wed, 03 Oct 2018 02:56:04 +0000

Great essay, You gave a good description of your language. I think you need to incorporate the questions from the prompt into your essay to make it a more complete paper. You stayed on topic of your language but I think you didn’t focus much on the questions. Overall, well written and provided good detail.

By: Manisha

Manisha — Mon, 01 Oct 2018 20:38:20 +0000

1. I think you're very clear in your analysis of your speech in regards to your personality. In fact, after reading this essay, I think that if a person who didn't know you, read this essay, they would know the three main parts of your personality. Overall, I really liked how you broke up the three parts into paragraphs and gave a detailed explanation of each. 2. Honestly, I don't think there's much for you to add. But, if I did have to suggest something, it would be to maybe provide an example or two with some details. For example a scenario and how you approach it in each different stage. 3. The first thing I noticed after finishing your essay that you were missing a conclusion which was a response to two questions given on the assignment page. So, that's all for what needs to be added. As for taking out, I don't think you need to take out anything. 4. I don't think you went off topic. I think you did a good job on this essay!