Comments for Introduction to Language / Problematizing Language

Comment on (Daysi) Reflective Essay 3 draft by Daysi

Daysi — Mon, 10 Dec 2018 04:55:45 +0000

In reply to Norely Rivas. thank you !

Comment on Reflective Essay Xavier by Ahmed

Ahmed — Sun, 09 Dec 2018 21:15:43 +0000

In your essay, it is good that you talked about the french dialect and the history of where the french language came from. I think you should give more examples for the french dialects.

Comment on (Norely) Essay #3- first draft by Ahmed

Ahmed — Sun, 09 Dec 2018 20:49:14 +0000

The way you talked and explain the Language you chose was very good. You gave information about the Dialect as well. You also speak about the history of the language and where it came from so it gives the reader a better explanation. What would be good if you could add more information about the dialect and an example with it as well.

Comment on Reflective Essay #3 Draft by Norely Rivas

Norely Rivas — Sat, 08 Dec 2018 04:27:04 +0000

Hey Ahmed,
I think you have enough background information in your essay, I think to better your essay you can add on some examples of the Arabic dialect that you chose and also add on how people everywhere perceive this langauage.

Comment on (Daysi) Reflective Essay 3 draft by Norely Rivas

Norely Rivas — Sat, 08 Dec 2018 04:21:17 +0000

Hey Daysi,
In my opinion I think that your essay is extremely informative. I get lots of background information about the French Language and it’s importance to you and France. It’s great so far, i think you should add on how French speaking people are perceived as for example, fancy, rich, snobby, upper class/lower class, extatic people when they visit other countries or when they interact with people with different ethnicities.

Comment on (Abigail) Reflective Essay3 by Malekie

Malekie — Fri, 07 Dec 2018 20:53:54 +0000

As far as points go, I believe you have enough. However, you should probably restructure your essay a bit. In the beginning you kind of get repetitive a bit with how many times you mention Spain.

Also, like Scott said; you started off with it being a dialect and then by the end of the draft it was an accent. Is it both, neither, or one or the other. You have to clarify that.

In regards to citing your work, I believe that’s only really necessary in the final draft of the paper so I’d say don’t worry too much about it.

Comment on (Lizbeth) Portuguese by Malekie

Malekie — Fri, 07 Dec 2018 20:28:15 +0000

You kind of did go off topic in your third paragraph (a little bit) but your overall point was pretty clear with the message you were trying to convey. Also, your conclusion could use a little work.

Comment on Reflective Essay Xavier by Daysi

Daysi — Fri, 07 Dec 2018 18:41:35 +0000

Hey Xavier,
Your paper seems really packed on with information about Quebec French, maybe you might want to include though the attitudes and the main questions that this essay is asking for.

Comment on Reflective Essay #3 Draft by Daysi

Daysi — Thu, 06 Dec 2018 16:24:59 +0000

hey ahmed. i think your essay is pretty good so far just dont forget to answer the main question which would be the attitudes and perceptions that people have towards this language. Also, why did you choose this language and where else do they speak this language ?

Comment on (Norely) Essay #3- first draft by Daysi

Daysi — Thu, 06 Dec 2018 16:16:45 +0000

I really like the essay how it is flowing so far. I got a good sense of the language and also what exactly you are going for. I would say to expand more on your essay, to talk more about the main idea of this essay which is how people perceive it and the education, culture, etc. I would say maybe another example would be good.